Post 6

Part one:

This week I did not got to the writing center, do to my concussion and a I had a doctors appointment for my head to. I did go in and talk to the tutors to give them a heads up.

Part two:

The piece of writing that I have choice to revise is a paper from English 101 about sexual assault. One of the first things I saw right away was that I did not explain what I was saying this and they and not saying what this and they was. Another thing I saw was that I would put extra words in there just to fill it. Which I find this weird, take you may have a word limit or a certain number of pages you need to fill, what are you going to do? What you are going to do is fill that word count by putting pointless words in your writing, when you just need to get the point across.

A safety measure that the Washington State University uses is a program called Green Dot. Green Dot is a "violence prevention program that focuses on making our campus safer by empowering bystanders to become active members in reducing power-based personal violence" (Green Dot WSU). They define “personal violence” as anything that ranges from partner violence, sexual assault, or stalking (Green Dot WSU). This program promotes anything that promotes "safety and communicates intolerance for any form of violence" (Green Dot WSU). Green Dot offers Bystander Training, which informs a trainee about the role of bystanders in a situation of personal violence, which, in turn, also increases the trainee's ability to intervene in such situations (Green Dot WSU).

This program, I need to explian saying the green dot program promotes safety. This is just one example but I do it through out the hole paper.

Part three:

Chapter 6 was easy to understand, even before reading this chapter I started to courcet myself when ever I would write this or they. After being in this class for only 6 weeks I am able to stop myself before I write vage words like this and they and things, I start to explain what those objects are.