Friday, January 18, 2013

Blog post 2


To whom it may concern:
Part 1:
            I am seeking a opportunity with your company to gain more work experience.

How I can benefit the company in many ways is that I treat everyone with respect and the why they should be treated, I’m not afraid to take charge and lead people, I am very creative and love to think of new ways to make some jobs easy and work fun, and I’m very outgoing. Have the qualities of a leader to get people involved and if I’m having a bad day I never let that interfere with my work. I have had work experience not only babysitting but in retail working at Hallmark for many of the holiday seasons and I have worked security at a company called Staff Pro for the Tacoma Dom and Quest field in Seattle. This last summer I got a paid Internship at HMS Host working at the Seattle Tacoma airport being a manager and working with Starbucks, Burger King, and Great American Bagel.

Thank you for taking time to consider me for the position at hand. If I am chosen I will not let you down, I have the drive to do the best I can at any situation given to me.
 
Part 2: In chapter one a few of the concepts that stood out to me where the Be Relevant and Be Clear. To me these two concepts kind of run together because if you are not relating back to your topic it will not be clear to your reader. Also with the Be Clear concept, when I am writing sometimes I think I am being clear at what I am saying but either I go back read it or someone else reads it and you can not even understand what I am trying to say. I think this is with my writing sometimes it is because in my head I think I wrote it down but I did not. In chapter 2 "the verb" for me is a very important concept because I know I use weak verbs. At times it's very difficult for me to find a stronger verb to use, and at other times I do not realized I used a weak verb.
 
Part 3: How I can benefit the company in many ways is that I treat everyone with respect and the why they should be treated
I can benefit this company in strong ways is that I treat everyone with respect and the way they should be treated
 

1 comment:

  1. I definitely do the same thing, you know what you want to put down on paper in your head but it can get mixed up when traveling from your mind to the pen. Which is why even though I am not a fan of revising it is a good thing to do because sometimes I write down garble.

    I like how you changed you first sentence to a stament in your letter, rather then a future thing you can do. It's saying you will do this because you will higher me.

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